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Look! This is my room.① It's really tidy,② There is④ a desk in my room. On the desk there are④ some books and a computer. And③ my bed is beside the desk.I like my bed very much because it's comfortable②(舒適的).Next to the bed there is a sofa.You can see a dog on the sofa. And its name is Wang wang. My room is not very big,② but③ it's very nice.② What do you think?
點(diǎn)評:本文開門見山,用Look! -詞迅速吸引注意力,之后用①句直接引入主題,介紹自己的房間。
并且用了一些優(yōu)美的形容詞②tidy,big,nice,comfortable等抒發(fā)了自己的感受。
此外,在描述房間內(nèi)物品時用到了書桌一床一沙發(fā)一狗的順序,使文章流暢、自然。
文章主體部分在介紹物品時用到了there be句型,巧妙地和含有介詞的句子交錯使用,避免了重復(fù)。
結(jié)構(gòu)方面,小作者使用了總一分一總的結(jié)構(gòu),使文章具有層次感
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